Comment Wall
Comment wall for my portfolio project. Here is the link. Enjoy!
-Casey Buller
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-Casey Buller
Introduction to Casey Buller not Bueller
Hi, my name is Casey Buller. I am currently a fourth year and graduate this spring! My major is Chemical Biosciences with a minor in Religious Studies. My future plans consist of pursuing either a medical degree or a master's degree and then going on to pursue a medical degree. Currently, though, I am just trying to graduate like the rest of us. I've always enjoyed science and the knowledge it provides humans to explain the intricacies of this world. I have always been interested in religion and it is more of just a "for fun" thing for me to do so I am not constantly bombarded with science course; I have some variety in my life. Outside of my studies I enjoy doing many different fun things. I go rock climbing three times a week, read books (other than my normal assigned texts), cook, and backpack/hiking. Currently, I am reading Crime and Punishment by Fyodor Dostoevsky and The Prince of Medicine: Galen in the Roman Empire by Susan P. Mattern. They're really gre
Hey Casey! Your website looks awesome and your picture of an Ewok right at the top of your introduction is very eye catching! The part where the Ewok listened to what they were planning and strategically cried was very interesting. If he hadn't cried right when he did he might have been killed! Instead he was put in his natural habitat. Very interesting idea. In the sentence that reads "The Ewok agreed and instructed not to stand up during the ride because if he stood up, the wind would blow him away due to the speed they were going at." the word "was" should follow "agreed and" I believe. Also I think it might sound better to say "due to the speed at which they were traveling" rather than "due to the speed they were going at." Overall it was an awesome introduction and I look forward to reading your future stories!
ReplyDeleteI liked the Ewok stories a lot! I could tell which stories they were based off of even without the author's note, which was cool. Although I must say that the two stormtroopers in the second half must have been the nicest stormtroopers in the galaxy, agreeing to give an Ewok a ride like that.
ReplyDeleteEither way I didn't expect the turtle Jatakas to translate so well into the Star Wars universe, but they did. I also like that one Ewok was clever and the other was foolish. It made the stories very different and interesting. Keep up the good work!
Casey,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story and thought your overall theme was very nice. I love minimalism so I was really into it. I also thought the picture for your comment wall was absolutely hilarious. As for the intro, I thought you did a great job for your story and making it star wars themed. Do you plan on making all of your stories have a star wars twist to it? That would be a really cool idea, and it would probably be really easy to recreate the Indian stories into star wars themes. My only critique is that I wasn't sure if you were doing a portfolio or a storybook. For your project, do you plan on creating a collection stories or is this one story that is going to lead into the other? Again, either option I think would be really interesting, and I liked the first story a lot. Keep up the good work!
Hey Casey,
ReplyDeleteWhat a cool idea to retell the stories about the two turtles through a cast of character everyone is familiar with! I think specifically choosing the Stormtroopers and Ewoks to tell the story was really clever as you didn't have to change any of the characteristics of the figures in order to make the story flow. I think one thing that could be beneficial is to establish how the Ewok understood the Stormtroopers intentions despite not speaking their language but I thought that having him start to squeal and cry was the perfect way for the Ewok to trick the stormtroopers into leaving him in the tree! Perhaps you could incorporate the language converter in this first story as you did in the second? I think in the second story you may want to give some reason that the Stormtroopers are willing to help him, since they tried to kill the Ewok they encountered in the previous story. I like how you set up the Ewoks inability to pass up berries at the beginning of this story so that we knew what was coming when you reintroduced them while the Ewok was on the speeder! I really liked that you paired these two stories together, the themes that unified them were really clever, well done!
Hey hey Casey,,
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, I can't say that I love starwars, having not seen any of the original trilogy. I think that your retelling is perfectly competent, if a bit safe. Given that moral stories do not allow for much flexibility, I would recommend that in the future you try adapting a story with named and malleable characters in the future. However, this story was fine, it seemed to be grammatically functional, although if I examined it with more scrutiny, I would probably find issues.
I’m curios as to why you didn’t kill off the Eewok that fell off the bike, since that’s what happened in the original, just curious as to why you made that choice. Otherwise, I think that these stories are perfectly functional, and I appreciate both of them. They’re not something that I would read if I didn’t have to, but they sure beat the dread of the inevitable heat death of the universe.
Hi Casey!
ReplyDeleteWow, I loved reading your story because I am such a fan of Star wars! I love this unique twist you took on this story, I appreciated how unique you made it. I also really enjoyed the dialogue that you included throughout your story. I think that is such a critical part to any good piece and you really just nailed it. I also love how one person took pity on the small Ewok, I liked that part because I feel like that would be me. I wonder how different the story would look if people had taken the time to just learn what the Ewok is without jumping to conclusions. What if you were to tell the story purely from the Ewok's point of view! I feel like that would be really weird but maybe interesting. Thanks for putting together such a fun story to read, good luck with the rest of your semester!
Casey, As a life long Star Wars fan (I am actually old enough to remember seeing all three original trilogy movies in the theater), I love the idea of reading about the mischievous, heroic Ewoks in your stories. Given the nature of their innocent, curious character, they are the perfect fit for any story in the Jakata Tales. I appreciate that you cast the antagonists as naïve stormtroopers and not a Mof or Sith lord Level character. This keeps the interaction between the furry protagonist and the imperial force innocuous. By choosing the Endor moon as the background to your story, I imagine it is well known enough for almost anyone to imagine what the lush forest would look like. Even though the setting is well known in pop culture, what if the landscape was described in a little more detail? Also, one of the most endearing traits of the Ewoks are their nonsensical words. Perhaps a series of onomatopoeia strung together could bring the Ewok words to life!
ReplyDeleteHi Casey I enjoyed reading your story, The Perfect Disguise. This is the second time I have read one of your stories and I love how you are sticking with a Star Wars themed portfolio! It is very unique the way you tell your stories and the dialogue you are able to add into them brings them to life! I wonder what the villagers would have done to the five brothers had they figured out they were Jedis? Do the villagers hate Jedis or are they just scared of them? Anyway I glad Jedi Bhima was there to rescue them even if the villagers did not want the help of a jedi. Where exactly were the fiver brothers headed after trying to travel to the spaceport? And why were the brothers on this planet in the first place. This would be a great story to continue as maybe a sequel or part 2 version. Also for one of the writing challenges you could add more details in if you would like to. If the story is meant to be interpreted as mysterious thats fine too. Either way I enjoyed reading your story and I am excited to read another one of yours in the future!
ReplyDeleteHey Casey! First of all, I would just like to point out how neat your site aesthetic looks. The geo-window design completes with the dark gray and dull yellow color scheme really screams “Star Wars.” In fact, I’m noticing that the white block letters do, too. Now about the real reason I’m commenting on your post; I read the second story on your site, named “The Perfect Disguise.” I thought the plot was great. I thought you did a good job revealing to the reader the thought processes between characters, within their dialogue. I felt that I got to know a little bit about each personality, and who was the careful/calculating one and who was more of a follower. The one and only suggestion I would like to make is more of a personal one. What if you made the names of the characters sound more futuristic, to go along with the Star Wars theme?
ReplyDeleteHi Casey! When I first saw your portfolio, it was aesthetically pleasing and very minimalistic which I love! I just read your story, The Ewok and the Stormtroopers, and I wanted to say wow. Your story started off with imagery at the beginning of your introduction and it gave me visuals what you were aiming for. I love a good story that is descriptive about their settings and what is happening. Also, I enjoyed the amount of dialogue you provided and how detailed it was because it gave me a better understanding of your story! It was easier to know what your plot was about. The way you divided up your paragraphs made the story flow better. I am not much of a Star Wars fan, but I do know a good chunk of the stories and characters because my family watches it. It is great how you were able to connect the Two Turtle story with Star Wars. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Casey,
ReplyDeleteI just finished reading your story "The Ewok and the Stormtroopers" and I absolutely adored it! I am fairly biased, as I enjoy the StarWars movies quite a lot, and let's be honest, who didn't fall in love with the ewoks when they first saw them! I was really impressed with not only your writing style, but choosing which story to base your retelling on. I couldn't think of a better analogy to the two turtles than the two ewoks. I wonder if the patient ewok had any fear or plans in his mind when he was captured? The relationships between the ewoks and stormtroopers in the 1st and 2nd story are drastically different. What if the first ewok told all of his friends about the stormtroopers when he was released back into the trees and explained how they could be easily fooled? I think if you added a little paragraph showing the changing dynamics between the 2 species (like how one day the empire decided that a language converter would help reduce accidents on endor) would make your story go from good to great. Looking forward to reading more! (Also, the Empire did nothing wrong!)
Hi Casey, I have already read both of your stories, however this weeks assignment is aimed at talking about the writers choice of images to use. I enjoyed reading your stories so much and thought I could add a little extra feedback on your images used. I think your stories are so unique that they both deserve equally as unique pictures. I am guilty of this, but even though the directions say we are required to use one picture doesn't mean we have to use just one. As one of my writing challenges I set off to add more pictures to one of my stories in order to make the story more inviting for the reader. I believe that if you added just two or three more pictures to both your portfolio stories that it would be the cherry on top! I thinking more star wars pictures haha. Who wouldn't want to see more pictures of Ewoks too? They're pretty dang cute! Again I loved reading both your stories and think that putting in these extra details will really make your story stand out from others!
ReplyDeleteHi Casey,
ReplyDeleteI like the Star Wars theme!
I don’t know the technical grammar word, but you have an interesting choice of tense for “The Perfect Disguise.” (It’s past perfect, or something… I never remember – the use of “has been” rather than “was”.) It seems to work, though sometimes you slip back into the more typical past tense of story narration.
Why did the brothers need to shape-shift? Wouldn’t it have been enough to hide their robes and lightsabers? (Not a sentence I’d seen myself writing for class, or really under any circumstances….)
I wonder if there’s a way you could modify the rakshasa to fit better in the Star Wars scenario you’ve set up for yourself – either take some creature from Star Wars or make the rakshasa have some connection to that set of “myths,” if you will.
I also wonder – since it wasn’t covered in the story, though maybe deliberately – what the villager’s reactions would have been to being saved by Jedi. Would they reconsider their views? Still attack the brothers?
Thanks,
A.M.